“I don’t care if he is in the hospital. Serves him right. Thinks he can just ignore me — and when he’s working on my dime, too – ”
She snorted. “He’ll be the one who pays.”
“Shirley, I’m not sure I want to represent you in this matter. There isn’t a reasonable person this side of the Mississippi would favor you over Jake on this.”
She glared at him across the desk and the air grew still, cold. “Well then. We’ll just have to find some unreasonable people, won’t we?”
Ba-DUM! I like it
Thanks, Merrilee! All as a result of your workshop and my journey through the heart of darkness/suburbia….
Intriguing character, with a very clear voice. I can’t help but not like her a little, already. I’d read on just to see if she gets what is coming to her, or at least see her repent of her self-centered ways. Two thumbs up from me, too.
As it stands now, she’s gonna get what’s coming to her — and she’s not gonna like it one tiny bit. But who knows? Once Shirley and I really start duking it out, there may be a totally different outcome.
Shirley’s one tough cookie and then some!
Something tells me she’ll get what she wants.
I don’t know — she is used to getting what she wants. So that’s why I’d like to surprise her this time.
Oh, I really like this! It feels like I just read a snippet out of longer piece – is this part of something you’re writing?
Thanks, Kathan. Yes, it is part of something I’m working on. It’s a story from Merrilee’s workshop that is growing and evolving. It may turn out to be what I work on during NaNo. I’m not sure yet — and I’ll probably do a blog post requesting advice from y’all before too long.
Well I really like the voice your character has here – like DS said, it’s very strong and I am intrigued…
Thanks! I hope I can keep her — and the story line — going.
Sorry I’m late for the party. The kids started school this week and It’s been a little hectic.
I like this. She’s scary! I can’t wait to know what she did to poor Jake.