Libby scrambled over the rocks, twigs and dirt stuck to the bloody sweat oozing down her back. The cubs! She had to get to the den first.
He came down the other side of the valley, the easy way, and he sauntered along the trail just ahead of her.
She finally faced him, breathless. “You can’t touch these wolves. They’re a protected species.”
He spat, then aimed his shotgun. “Just watch.”
Love the drama! I most definitely want to read more. Does he fire? Do the cubs survive? Does Libby throw herself in front of the gun? There are so many unanswered questions that I find I must read on. Oh, why did you leave us hanging? Great job!
Thanks! I don’t know the exact answers yet, but I think they are all yeses. Perhaps John and Martha will show up to save the day. heh heh
You’ve grabbed me around my jugular vein. I fear I’ll begin spilling blood if the suspense isn’t relieved immediately, thus easing tension on the hook. I’m possibly dying here…
or…
I’m impressed by your flash fiction this morning. Like darksculptures, I have lots of questions running through my mind.
(Have I ever introduced you to my multiple personalities?)
Wow, Shaddy — I mean ShaddyOne or ShaddyTwo, not sure which. Pretty visceral imagery there.
All I have to do is spend this year finishing writing it, then editing it, then submitting it to next year’s Amazon Breakthrough Novel Competition, then beating out you guys and the other 100,000 people competing, then publishing and the suspense will all be relieved then, I promise.
That SOB!! I hope Libby kicks his…you know what!
I love the ‘He spat’, that really pulled it together for me. I could picture this scene perfectly.
I wish I could just read the darn thing already…
You and me both, Dayner. I wish I could just WRITE the darn thing already.
This leaves me breathless and wanting to know what comes next, does she win, what came before, and why is she bleeding. Great attention getter!
Thanks, Parrot. I, of course, want to know all those things as well! Some of them I do, and some of them are still in process.
There’s a little bit of an introduction to Libby in my Excerpt: Tap Dancing at the County Fair which you can click on at the top of my blog home page.
This is great! My heart is pumping and I want to know more!
Thanks Kathan! Me too…. I have a lot of blanks to fill in, but I’m working on it….
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